Does anyone have suggestions for helping one of our staff change her writing style? Her grammar, spelling, punctuation etc are excellent, but her natural writing style is extremely florid and erudite, with lots of multi-syllable words, passive tense etc. She is welcome to write internal materials as she pleases, but unfortunately her preferred style isn't a great match for our print and web materials which have to be very brief and extremely direct. We are in a community with a lot of English-as-second-language visitors and residents for whom clarity is important; we are also starting to work with a wider range of children and families, and she struggles with writing at a level appropriate for younger children.
My first approach--to edit her work and explain what I was changing and why--doesn't seem to have helped very much. I would love any suggestions of resources or approaches that have helped you or someone you know write more clearly--I would like to be able to offer a few options. I was lucky enough to have a high-school composition teacher who prepared me very well for the work world but it was so long ago, I don't remember how she did it.